Fear

I will be critiquing this poem on behalf of
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Firstly, I apologise for the delay in getting this critique to you. We have been incredibly backlogged.

Now, the crit:

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You have asked the following questions:
1. Does it flow?
2. Does it provoke emotion well?
3. General constructive criticism:

1. Does it flow?
Yes. You have managed to rhyme in a non-distracting way and with no forced rhyme. Because of this it flows very well.

2. Does it provoke emotion well?
Personally I would say no. I didn't feel any fear or anything when reading this. It could have used more fear-provoking imagery to awaken the fear within me, but as it stands it simply reads as a good rhyme.

3. Constructive Criticism:
- In the final line, I would change 'for' to 'that' to keep it more grammatically correct.
- I would punctuate this a bit more to indicate where one should breathe or pause, as with it being a rhyming piece it becomes a bit 'floaty' after a while, like recitation.

J